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Handle With Care [Writer's Jam 2024]

Posted by f4t4lfrankie - June 17th, 2024


Before you found me, I’d fallen from many hands. The worst part was the sound— high and piercing, demanding attention. Everyone at the table would suck in stuttering gasps or clench their hands around the silken tablecloth with bated breath. Despite my structure, I only suffered harmless, cosmetic scuffs.


I was always fragile, a fact illustrated by my delicate frame, held upright by a thin stem and topped by a dainty glass basin often filled with the finest, reddest wines. The upper class cherished me, taking me from the cupboard for an occasional jovial night of overindulgence. My beauty shone from where I sat, full and glistening. A radiant glass that belonged to a radiant woman. Alas, all good things must end. After a while in the lonely cabinet, I was passed down to the woman’s son.


Her son was a bitter man who’d slam me onto his sticky wood table and moldy cork coasters when he didn’t get what he wanted. The unfamiliar, unrelenting force shot through me in shrill shockwaves and ate away at my pristine body. My insides became stained with cheap liquor, dull and lifeless. It made him happy to ruin me, and I was built to please. His late mother’s favorite glass became an outlet for his hatred, ugly and unlovable.


By the time we met, cracks ran along my base in bluish, sickly lines, glass splinters poking out from my sides. Don’t touch me, they screamed, or I’ll bury my pointed hooks into you. You picked me up anyway, caressing my face with creased brows and wiping away a coat of dust with a fond, featherlight touch. Your fingertips caught on a jagged edge. I loved you immediately with a horrible reliant obsession, like a parasite loves a host. You loved me like a girl loves her father— idealistic and misguided. 


You took me home, rinsing me off in smooth, practiced motions. Soapy, lukewarm water and sweet nothings bubbled inside me as I was painstakingly hand-washed for the first time in ages. My insides strained to hold together only so I could do right by you. When I gleamed proudly, clean and new, you poured a familiar wine. After years, I was home. 


Neither of us noticed it spilling out of me, pouring down your arm and onto the kitchen floor. I caught on your soft lips, opening you too easily. We bled, thick and languid. I begged you for more as you placed me down, your expression souring.


Fill me up with all you can give, so I won’t be alone and empty. Fill me up with expensive nectar as it leaks out onto the floor. Fill me up over and over until you are drained and parched like me. Drink from me until you become useless and ugly too, your face covered in thin, red scars. Don’t leave.


Hold me so tight that it hurts— so tight that I shatter into your pale skin. I’d happily live forever, nestled deep in your tissue. Digging ravenously into the flesh of your arms, I’d bask in you; warm, red, and perfect. I’d say I didn’t mean to make you cry. We know it’d be a lie, but does it matter if we choose to believe it? Do you love me as much as I love you? When you see the faint afterimage of scars I’d leave, would you smile? Would you feel needed? If you loved again, would you ache because of me? 


Like a host to a parasite, you’d eventually have nothing left to give, overcome by my greed. You’d die on the stained kitchen floor, and I’d die with you once your lifeless form was reduced to cracked, yellowing bones and broken glass. Maybe it’d be better that way, my dear. Or maybe it’s best you put me back where you found me, in a dusty box of your late father’s belongings. He loved you exactly like I love you.


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Loved the prose in this. It flowed so nicely. Lovely piece. Really neat choice for how to use the prompt.

tysm!! ^^

Nice!

God this was beautiful, great work! It's awesome to see someone take a more poetic and short-form approach to the Writer's Jam, not too many people do that and it's particularly hard to do something like this right! This feels really intimate and genuine, I appreciate your participation a lot and I hope to see you in the next one too!

On a surface analysis, I'd say you nailed the conveyal of a glass' emotions with your imagery and use of metaphors, syntax and the pacing and rhythm of the prose; insofar as I interpret something like that for your vision, I'd call it successful art.

Think you could write some beautiful poetry by the way, if you'd enjoy doing so.

I also liked the glass' personality and manner of speech, pretty sexy and sublime.

The contrast between the different owners and their treatments was also interesting.

I usually abhor obtuse vocabulary (though I use it! XP) but in this case, rather, it seems fitting and purposeful to me for the effects I mentioned, so great job.

If I were to make any suggestion it would be to develop longer declamations of the glass' deeper emotions, as I feel like much water can flow from deep fountains such as these, so to speak; I'd probably say to add a gradually increasing intensity/drama/tension/something to prevent it from feeling repetitive, if you'd roll with this.

But in any case, great job! Congratulations on second place!

tysm!! i love using simple words to describe stuff tbh. i like that everyone will be able to get it. i was originally going to write a poem for this, but then got this idea and ran with it ^^

I love how poetically it describes a story of inanimate object! As a reader, I see this as a beautiful story showing three different generations through the prism of how they care for things they own. As a person who attempts to write, it makes me think of the strengths of written art.
Thank you!

Damn. This was very sharp and on point. I dont know if i missed something but it felt as though the glass became more harsh the more it broke down, and I like that symbology of fragility mixed with the physical feeling of sharpness against ones skin

Wow, an unexpected approach and a really unexpected point of view. A well executed 1st person perspective on a delicate topic. A great entry, totally deserve being among winners